Environmenlol problems ore loo big for individuol countiles ond individuol persons fo oddress. ln olher wotds, we hove reoched fhe sloge where lhe only woy to prolecl lhe environrnenl is ol on inlernolionol level. To whot exfenl do you ogree or disogree wifh fhis opinion?

Climate change is a phenomenon affecting all
people
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all walks of life, from individual
citizens
to whole countries and huge multinational companies.
Therefore
, l disagree with the notion that the only way to address the environmental problems is at
international
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level
. l firmly believe that
this
colossal problem can only be handled if all individuals contribute; all governments take
steps
at
national
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level
and
also
join hands at an international
level
. Undoubtedly, gigantic
steps
need to be taken
,
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and are being taken at the international
level
. The 'COP2f in Paris in November 2015 is a step in
this
direction. The aim of 'COP2f is well known: to reach a universal agreement limiting the rise in global average temperature to 2'C above pre-industrial levels. All nations are realizing that climate change is one of the greatest challenges faced by mankind today. Many
steps
can be taken at the national
level
. Governments can aware
people
of the benefits of using
energy efficient
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devices.
For instance
,
this
year government of
lndia
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India
gave 2 LED
bulbs
to each government employee at Rs 10/- each under the "Prakash Path" scheme. The cost of each bulb is Rs 400/-. The cost will be recovered by adding a very small amount
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each month's electricity bill for about a year. ln about 100 cities, the streetlights have been replaced with LED
bulbs
, which is a saving of a huge amount per day. LED
bulbs
use a tenth of electricity as compared to other
bulbs
. Once
people
realize that by using LED
bulbs
, their electricity bills will
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, they will be prepared to make the initial heavy investment
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also
.
Although
the international and national
level
steps
are imperative, it is
also
a fact that individual action combined with governmental action can do a lot more to prevent climate change than if individual
citizens
were not involved. ln a world of six billion
people
, if everyone stopped wasting water, disposed
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their rubbish properly, started accepting recycled material and stopped succumbing to consumerism,
then
it would go a long way in solving the problem of
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. Summing up, individual
citizens
cannot sit back and say it is someone else's responsibility to protect the environment; we must all play our part - individual
citizens
and governments at the national and international
level
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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