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The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK,divided into 3 categories ,from 1995-2002.

The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of telephone calls in the UK,divided into 3 categories ,from 1995-2002.
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The chart illustrates
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 number of
minutes
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 of telephone communication in the UK between the years 1995-2002.
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 sum of the phone calls
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 into 3 classifications(local,national and international and mobiles).Units are measured in
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.
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,throughout the
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 local calls have been a leader
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 the total number of calls
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when
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 national and international calls rise
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 a significant rate
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each year.Mobile calls began from scratch,
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despite
 of
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 have been achieved
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fair progress. In 1999 local calls reached their maximum
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 90
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billion
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minutes
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after
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 consequence calls sharply declined to just over 70
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billions
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billion
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minutes
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.What cannot be said about national and international calls,
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 the fact that from the year 1995 to 1999 amount of calls slightly increased,
then
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 between 2000-2002 grew up with
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 difference. In terms of mobiles was spot that in comparison with national calls mobiles inclined with a certain rate.In 2002 the sum of the calls of these two was approximately above each other.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes with synonyms.
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