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Some organisations believe that their employees should dress smartly. Others value quality of work above appearance. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#organisations #employees #dress #value #quality #work #appearance
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In multinational company believe that wearing apparels play an important role to maintain dignity in the business world. Another group of thinkers
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also believes
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quality
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 rather than dressing. Both have its own
pron
in favor of (an action or proposal etc.)
pro
 and cons and discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin
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 with smart dress code is required in the reputed organization because its create a positive impression in the mind of
visitor
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the visitor
. Every job profile
have
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has
 its unique dressing
pattern
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by
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of
this
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 we can judge the field of employees with
they
of them or themselves
their
 associated.
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, employees connected with law have a black coat dressing
pattern
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.
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 heel shoes or sandals are most popular in marketing persons. In
same way
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the same way
 every job profile
have
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has
 its own unique dressing
pattern
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. In
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
 view, dressing
pattern
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 is not a symbol of good
work
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quality
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 because its only associated with
out side
beyond the boundary of; external to
outside
 of the person while good
work
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quality
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 is an inbuilt characteristics. For the success of any organization
is depends
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depending
 on
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quality
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the quality
 of employees not on dressing
pattern
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. As per my knowledge, mostly flights attendant wears a neat and clean cloth, but
quality
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 of flight doesn't rely on
this
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 its depend on comfortable seating arrangement, follow strict flight schedule etc. According to my opinion
quality
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work
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 is more important compare to smart dress. Any organization can provide better services to their customers if they have an ethical
employees
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employee
. So,
quality
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work
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 is an important parameter for any company compared to
appearance
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an appearance
 by dressing
pattern
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