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The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the top ten countries with the highest spending on travel in 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 bar chart illustrates the highest amount of money
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spent
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was spent
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 on travel in 2014 by 10 different countries. Units are measured in
billion
USD
.
Overall
, It’s clear from the
gragh
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graph
 that the highest cost
on
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 travel was in China,
while
 the least was in Taiwan. As we can see from the
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, China spent about 110
billion
USD
,
while
United
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 States and Germany came
at
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 the
second
 position with 85
billion
USD
. The quantity of money that
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 in
United
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 Kingdom was almost half of what
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 in China which was 55
billion
USD
. Singapore’s spending
for
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 travel was 25
billion
USD
,
and
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which
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this
almost
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to
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what
spent
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 in Malaysia. The figure for South Korea is equal to the one in Hong Kong which is 20
billion
USD
. India spent approximately 15
billion
USD
. The quantity of money
that
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spent
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was spent
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for
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on
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traveling
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travelling
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 in Taiwan was the least which was 16
billion
USD
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words billion, usd with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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