Recent figures show an increase in violent crime among youngesters under the age of 18. Some psychologist claim that the basic reason for this is that children thesedays are not getting the social and emotional learning they need from parents and teachers. To what extent you agree or disagree ?

Juvenile delinquency is one of the heating issue
in co
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issues
mmunities. Psycho
logical consi
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Psychologists
der that raise in criminal activities among young people is due to the lack of social as well as emotional guiden
ce from
something that provides direction or advice as to a decision or course of action
guidance
teachers and parents.
However
, I agree with the given statement to a larger extent and
also
mention other factors that are affecting to surge the
crime
ratio. From my practical point of view, there are two reasons that augment the
crime
among the younge
sters.
a young person of either sex
youngsters
First
and foremost reason for
this
is that parents have hectic
lifestyle. Beca
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a hectic lifestyle
use of
this
they hardly spend get
time
for theri
child
of them or themselves
their
ren, which creates a problem of isolation. Apart from
this
, these days children are not living with their elders who cannot provide emotional touch to their young
gener
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younger
ation, even it is difficult share good qualities with them . Acc
or
Accept space
.
ding to the recent survey conducted by the
Crime
Department of Delhi reveal
es that
make visible
reveals
revealed
more than 53% of youths commit serious offences, in the absence of their elders.
Secondly
, teachers must provide social knowledge.
In other words
, teachers should teach their students to distinguish between good and bad things, which helps in termin
ate antis
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terminating
ocial behaviours
such
as, bulling and disruptive nature. Since teachers are overfl
ooded with
loaded past capacity
overloaded
academic pressure, they give minima
l amount of
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a minimal amount
time
providing social guidelines.
Hence
, elders become more work-oriented in their life and on the
s
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at
ame
time
teachers have to complete their syllabus. Paradoxically, younge
sters acqui
a young person of either sex
youngsters
re violent behaviours from media.
To e
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the media
xplain
further
, with the invent of technology young generation have e
norm
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has
ous choices of Web series and movies in which there are plenty of violent acts are shown in it.
Moreover
, there are illegal activities nd dru
gs
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and
consumption are of
ten show in it
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is often shown
is often showing
, which creates negati
ve impact on yo
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a negative impact
ung people.
For instance
, movie
namely Udta
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movie, namely
Punjab is based on drugs that has deteri
orate effec
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deteriorated
t on young
gener
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the younger
ation.
Thus
, media
also
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the media
contribute some proportion to an increase in
crime
. In conclusion, it is truly said that
crime
ratio of yo
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the crime ratio
ung people has gone up owing to parents and teachers do not have sufficient
time
for their children to inculcate the knowledge about social and emotional. In my opinion, I support to
this
view to a far, but I believe that media play a minor role in
crime
.
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the crime
◾️pls evaluate

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