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The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of university graduates in Canada from 1992 to 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph
illustrate
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 female and male university
graduates
' numbers in Canada between 1992 and 2007. Female
graduates
 have always had higher numbers than male
graduates
 in all years.
Overall
, in both female and male
of
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graduates
number
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the number
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have
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has
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 increased over the period.
At
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 the
beginnig
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beginning
,
number
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a number
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 of female
graduates
were
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was
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 under the 100,000 and
number
 of male
garduates
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graduates
were
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was
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 70,000.From 1992 to 2005,the
number
 of female and male
graduates
have
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rose
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,
however
,after that year their
number
have
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slowly
rose
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. After 2000, female
graduates
have
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dramatically
grew
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 until 2006.Ina
ddition
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addition
of
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this
, male
graduates
 slightly grew from 2000 to 2006.
Lthough
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Although
 the
female
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number of female
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graduates
, the
male
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number of male
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graduates
numberhave
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number have
 never decreased
freom
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from
 its beginning
number
.There were approximately 150,000 female
graduates
 and 95,000 male
graduates
 in 2006.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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