Some people think that young people should spend their free time with their families instead of enjoying outside entertainment, others do not agree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

It is argued by an overwhelming majority of people that youngsters should spend their leisure time with their families rather than spending outdoor activities and entertainment. I am of the opinion that they should spend part of their time with families and part of them with their friend in outdoor activities. There are two prominent reasons why spending time with families can be seen necessary.It strengthens the family bond. In todays modern life as family members have a lot responsibilities to do so they spend much less live with each other it is more evident in big cities, where living spaces is really high,
for example
, food costs a lot and rents are high.
Therefore
, all people, particularly parents have to do two or even three jobs in order to make ends need.In
this
way spending free date with family provides the family member with an opportunity to play with each other and enjoy of family gathering and strengthen their relationship.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • relationship
  • communication
  • experience
  • learn
  • opportunity
  • exposure
  • culture
  • perspective
  • development
  • interest
  • skill
  • socialize
  • peer
  • broaden
  • horizon
  • opinion
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