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Some people work for the same organisation all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organisations. Discuss both those views and give your opinio.

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Work is a vital component for all of us and people is
associatedin
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associated with
associated in
 varieties of
Institute
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the Institute
.
Hence
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,
the given opinion
to
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with
 the statement that some employee have
ending
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ended
 their carrier in various
kind
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kinds
 of organisation.One group thinks its good for them while others
disagre
be of different opinions
disagree
disagreed
. There are obviously justifiable
arguments but
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arguments, but
 in my opinion
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 do think upside of joining in different organisation supersedes the downside. In defence of my position
,
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,
the obvious argument that
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 can put forward is that
jobing
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Jobing
 in different work place can be developed
by
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from
 a
persons
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person's
experiences
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experience
.To
elaborat
marked by complexity and richness of detail
elaborate
, when someone works one more
companie
an institution created to conduct business
company
, he/she
observe
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observes
has observed
is observed
is observing
 many distinguish tasks and management, those were absent in his former
workplac
a place where work is done
workplace
. For
exampl
an item of information that is typical of a class or group
example
examples
, David worked under a software company and now working
in
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at
with
 NASA which is specialised in aerospace. Every institutes
has
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have
 its own criteria for promotion as well as facilities of his
worker
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work
works
. So
,
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,
those who experiencing different organisation
,
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,
he could consume individual facilities and from there he can justify right one for him.For
instanc
an occurrence of something
instance
instances
,
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,
Microsoft and Amazon's opportunities have differences. An employee could enjoy
natural beauty
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the natural beauty
 of different place, if she/he change his/her work place in several
time
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times
.
In addition
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,
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,
he might be familiar with that places native culture and acquire geographical
knowledg
the psychological result of perception and learning and reasoning
knowledge
. In
conclusio
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
, human belong to short life span.We can gain
variety
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a variety
 of
thing
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things
 by changing job location.At least
,
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,
one can
makes
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make
skillful
having or showing knowledge and skill and aptitude
skilful
 of his own.

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