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Some people work for same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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More employees prefer to
work
 always for
one
 certain employer
,
Accept space
,
 but some workers to various. Every option has a advantages: long term working for certain company gives more comfort like a familiar colleagues and atmosphere at
work
, habitual tasks.
However
, hired by different employer can to improve
competitive ability
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the competitive ability
 of workers
,
Accept space
,
in addition
 give a chance to earn more. In my opinion,
work
 for different companies has a privilege. Nowadays there are many ways to
built
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build
 a successful career,
one
 of them
work
 for
one
 company constantly like in 80s, 90s. There are some benefits: every day employer
meet
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meets
 the same people, maybe between colleagues have a same
friends
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friend
, known atmosphere and furniture, stable monthly salary, high chance
to
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for
of
 promotion.
For example
: my granddad worked as a doctor in rural hospital since he was 25 years old until retirement. He was
doctor
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doctored
,
then
 head of
department
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the department
 of surgery,
then
 head of
hospital
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the hospital
a hospital
.
On the other hand
, in connection with
developing
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the development
development
 of technology, working for various
company
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companies
 gives employee more opportunities to improve productivity, because competition between
hired
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hiring
 workers.
For instance
,
work
 from home gives a possibility to complete different tasks from different employees and get a more extra pay for it at the same time saving time for
work
-life balance. In my opinion, these days working for different companies at once more efficiency than for
one
.
This
 way helps to regulate time to
work
 and family, to earn more money, and to rise individuality of workers.
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  • stability
  • loyalty
  • seniority
  • job satisfaction
  • rapidly changing job market
  • adapt to
  • work culture
  • career progression
  • network
  • diversity of experience
  • adaptability
  • career aspirations
  • dynamic nature
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