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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 diagram is highlighting the inland before and after construction. Were
touriust
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tourist
tourists
 could get provisions.
Overall
, the most important change in
island
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the island
an island
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 after
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its establisment
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establisment
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establishment
. Before raising the
island
 was desolate Before
Establisment
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Establishment
 of
island
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the island
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. The
island
 was desolated there was no
human
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humans
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 could come there to
spent
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spend
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thair
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their
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 life or
yor
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your
 holidays because there was
not
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no
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accomodation
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accommodation
facility
was
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apply
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provided.
Moreover
, There was
qiute
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quite
diffieult
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difficult
to
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in
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 food
in
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on
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desolated
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the desolated
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island
. Because to find food
alon
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alone
in
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on
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island
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the island
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 there would be chances of dangerous
animls
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animals
was
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were
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 too risky. And the main need is
water
 for every living thing and
sea
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the sea
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 has salty
water
 so
its
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it's
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 difficult to separate salt from
water
. If tourist would drink sea
water
 without
purify
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purifying
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 it can
be suffer
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suffer
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the
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apply
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in
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from
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dihydration
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dehydration
 but there
wre
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were
are
 some advantages of
island
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the island
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 before construction which was clean air, less pollution,
control
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and control
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in
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of
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climat
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climate
 chances. After the
establisment
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establishment
 of
island
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the island
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. It's easier to live there. people can easily go there
for
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to
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 spend their holidays and can give quality time
to
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with
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thier
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their
 family.
Moreoier
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Moreover
, the biggest need of every vacation is food. people love to enjoy
foods
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food
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varities
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varieties
varies
 from
diffrent
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different
 places. After
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the establisment
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establisment
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establishment
Resturnent
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Restaurant
facility
 has
provided
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been provided
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 to people.
In
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Island
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island
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the island
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accomdation
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accommodation
facility
 and
beach
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a beach
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facility
 for swimming
provided
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are provided
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 t
tourist
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tourists
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.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, establisment, facility, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 3 times.
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