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The bar chart below shows the total case of COVID-19 in ASEAN countries per 5 May 2020. The table displays how COVID-19 has affected three different regions in Indonesia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The bar chart below shows the total case of COVID-19 in ASEAN countries per 5 May 2020. The table displays how COVID-19 has affected three different regions in Indonesia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The bar chart below
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 the amount of total
cases
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 which happened in various
countries
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 in Southeast Asia
per
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 5 May 2020. The
affect
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 that COVID-19 has
caused
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to
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on
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 three different regions in
Indonesia
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also
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on
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 the table.
Overall
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,
countries
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 with the most infected
number
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 of people
is
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 mostly located in the south wing and
is
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contiguous with each other,
while
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 only a small amount of total
cases
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 are found in
countries
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 in the north wing. In
Indonesia
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, the
number
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 of
cases
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 confirmed, recovered, and deaths was the highest among all the other regions. In
details
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, the
cases
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 of COVID-19 confirmed in Southeast Asia
is
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 mostly found in Singapore, which has 19.351
cases
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 in total, followed by
Indonesia
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, which is adjacent
with
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to
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 Singapore (11.396) and other
countries
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such
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 as
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia and Thailand.
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, the
number
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 jumped down rapidly to only in hundreds in Vietnam (271
cases
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), followed by Myanmar (165) and fell continuously to only 19
cases
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 in Laos, which became the least infected in ASEAN. In terms of detailed
cases
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 confirmed in
Indonesia
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 alone, the highest
number
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 was met in Jakarta with 4.539
cases
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 confirmed, 632
cases
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 recovered, and 408 deaths. In other West Java cities and East Java, there were slightly more than a thousand confirmed
cases
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 and more than a hundred
of
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recovered and death
cases
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, except for West Java, which only has 86
cases
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.

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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cases, countries, indonesia, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • COVID-19
  • ASEAN
  • cases
  • pandemic
  • affected regions
  • total cases
  • trends
  • increase
  • plateau
  • comparison
  • significance
  • patterns
  • healthcare facilities
  • population density
  • rapid growth
  • implications
  • region-specific details
  • bar chart
  • table
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