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The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts show the sources of the electricity produced in 4 countries between 2003 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Practice 1: Illustrated in the pie charts is the percentage of three different sources
for
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electricity
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 generation which are fossil
fuel
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,
hydro
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 and nuclear
power
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 in four countries between 2003 and 2008.
Overall
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,
while
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 fossil
fuel
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 was harnessed as the major
electricity
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 source in
India
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 and Vietnam,
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
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 appeared to be produced the most in Morocco and
Sweden
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.
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, only
India
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 and
Sweden
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 had
electricity
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 produced from nuclear
power
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.
It is clear that
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 most of
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electricity
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the electricity
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 in
India
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 came from fossil
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fuel
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fuels
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, which made up nearly four-fifths of all their sources. The
second
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 heavy user of
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 source was Vietnam with 56%. Meanwhile, the rate of
Sweden
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 and Morocco ’s fossil
fuel
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 for
electricity
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 production was around 5% only. In the case of
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
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, Morocco utilized
this
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 energy the most compared to other nations at 95%. The
next
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 follow-up was
Sweden
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 with over half of
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electricity
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the electricity
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 production stemming from
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hydro
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hydropower
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power
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.
In contrast
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,
hydro
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 energy appeared to be the least
favored
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favoured
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 in
India
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 out of all studied countries. Nuclear
power
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 was used for energy generation in only
Sweden
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 and
India
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, accounting for 44% and 4% respectively.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity, fuel, hydro, power, india, sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Electricity generation
  • Energy sources
  • Coal-powered
  • Natural gas
  • Nuclear energy
  • Hydroelectric power
  • Renewable resources
  • Energy mix
  • Clean energy
  • Sustainable practices
  • Trend analysis
  • Environmental impact
  • Energy transition
  • Significant increase/decrease
  • Energy reliance
  • Energy portfolio
  • Year-over-year comparison
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