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Many businesses choose to recruit from within their own country rather than sourcing staff from overseas.what are the advantages or disadvantages of this trend?

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Lots of companies
decides
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decide
 to employ the people from their own
country
 and not those
from
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of
 others. The downsize is, that usually the
localas
relating to or applicable to or concerned with the administration of a city or town or district rather than a larger area
locals
local as
locales
locale
 can cost more as well as they can be
underqualified
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under qualified
.
On the other hand
, the good side in
this
 is, if there is more employed in the
country
 there is less unemployment and the more money
stayes
a woman's close-fitting foundation garment
stays
 inside the borders.
Firstly
, when a firm decides to employ people from abroad they usually do it for two reasons. One of
that is
, that for the same amount of work they can find a cheaper
labeour
a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages
labour
labours
 in some other (usually undeveloped)
country
, which means less costs for the same work done. Even though in same land we can have a lot of people
unemployed but
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unemployed, but
 it happens lots of times that they are just not qualified for the work. So it means that some
bussines
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
 can struggle to find the right staff.
Secondly
, the good sides to employing the members of your own nationality can make the economy blossom, because if a worker lives and works at the same place he will
also
 spend his money in that area.
Therefore
 other business can flourish and expand, so it is a win win situation.
Morever
in addition
Moreover
 the unemployment can
decreese
decrease in size, extent, or range
decrease
decreased
decreases
significantely
in a statistically significant way
significantly
, which is
also
 one burden less on the
countries
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country's
 budget. In
conculusion
a position or opinion or judgment reached after consideration
conclusion
conciliation
conclusions
, sourcing workers from the same
country
instead
 from abroad can have upsides and downsides. If companies decide to take workers from their own land it can cost them more and in the end they might end up with not qualified staff. On the other side if they choose to do that they can help the whole economy and help the non workers to find a job.
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