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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The line graph compares the amount of
good
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transport
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 in four distinct modes in the UK from 1974 to 2002 via
road
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,
water
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, rail, and
pipeline
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.
Overall
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,
road
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 infrastructure was the most efficient transportation and the efficiency increased over the period.
While
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pipeline
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the pipeline
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 was the least favourable by the UK. The unit is measured in tons.
To begin
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 with, in the initial year (1974), only a few UK people
have
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transferred merchandise via
pipeline
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.
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, nearly 40
million
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 tons were accounted for
water
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 and railway
transport
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 with slightly higher
in
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rail line popularity. The number almost doubled in
road
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 transportation and accounted for the highest popularity of the mode of
transport
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. In the following 8 years,
pipeline
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 and
water
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 gained in the number of users,
whereas
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 a slight drop can be observed from
road
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 and train users. In the year 1994, after the fluctuation in four modes of
transport
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, the number of infrastructure users was
then
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 risen and accounted for just under 100
million
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 and 40
million
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 respectively.
On the contrary
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, after 1994, the quality of
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pipeline
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pipelines
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 remained
exactly
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 20
million
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 until 2002.
While
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, after the oscillation in
water
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 transportation it,
thenthen
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then then
 reached just above 60
million
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 in the final year.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words transport, road, water, pipeline, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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