Science tells us some activities are good for our health and there are some unhealthy activities. But millions of people still do those unhealthy activities. Why? What can we do to change this situation?

There are various benefits
in
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of
having a healthy lifestyle, and almost all adults recognize
this
as common sense.
However
, a large group of people
persist
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persists
in doing unhealthy activities. I,
personally believe
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personally, believe
that resulting in
this
kind of trend is mainly due to the rapid development of modern society, which leads an uneasy atmosphere. Compared with people from rural area, city residents have faced more
pressure especially
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pressure, especially
those who work in
metropolis
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the metropolis
.
Therefore
, some unhealthy activities
such
as alcoholism, smoking and even drugs have become them an outlet which can
instantly but
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instantly, but
briefly relieve them from
painfulness
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the painfulness
in reality. For
this
kind of unhealthy activities, people do not need to invest too much energy to get the maximum release
comparing
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comparable
to gym activities.
Moreover
, unhealthy diets are
also
listed into unhealthy activities. Canned and bottled food,
for example
,
have probably become
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has probably become
priority
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a priority
for those civil servants or other occupations whose busy lifestyle, because they have not enough time to prepare lunches or dinners.
In addition
, due to the popularity of the internet and the developments of the computers, an increasing number of people are willing to choose the new kind of entertainments--- e-sports. I do not think that it will be
help
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a help
for people’s health, which just another term of
sedentary lifestyle
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a sedentary lifestyle
. Several measures can be taken to change
this
situation.
Firstly
, the employees’ salary should be increased proportionally through the government’s support, as
main cause
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the main cause
of stress mainly come from insufficient wages.
Secondly
, the government should allocate money to build public areas
such
as parks and basketball courts, residents obtain various options to unwind. In conclusion, some people find it difficult to change their lifestyles and some habits are a result of
stresses
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the stresses
of modern life. The government has a vital role to play in dealing with
this
problem.
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