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The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of books read by men and women at Burnaby Public Library from 2011 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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These data sources clearly communicate
that
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the percentage of books which
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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 read in Burnaby Public Library between 2011 and 2014. In 2011, the number of
woman’s
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readers
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 made up nearly 5,000 people, which were higher 1,500 than that of man. In the following
one
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year, women tended to read books more than men, the rate of them
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 roundly 8000 people,
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 the figure for men was 3,900
readers
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. By 2013, both
of
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gender’s
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genders’
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 figures increased significantly and were similar to each other, at around 10,000
readers
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, the reverse pattern was seen in 2014 when the proportion of
female’s
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reader
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readers
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 dropped dramatically by 8,000 people, there was a sharp went up of
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the figure
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 for
male’s
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male
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readers
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.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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