Some people think that it is important to use leisure time for activities that improve the mind, such as reading and doing word puzzles. Other people feel that it is important to rest the mind during leisure time.

For some group of people, they decided to use their free
time
to do exercise. They believe their
life
should be on schedule, and should put their
life
in a meaningful place, so they would try to read extra book and newspaper. After reading the above articles, they could have got more knowledge. They thought it was a great chance to improve themselves, they need to keep studying and training their mind every
time
. Leisure
time
must be better for people to think about a question- how to be
response
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responsive
to them and their
life
? How to let their
life
be more meaningful? The answer should be
study
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studied
studying
. Study all the
time
and try to keep people’s sense in environment, weather, social etc. People can collect the other skills, like patient and careful. Each skill can be used in people’s normal
work
and
life
.
Therefore
, the leisure
time
can be make
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can make
sure to use more meaningful and having
positive impact
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a positive impact
to people’s
life
. For another group, they thought the leisure
time
should be used for rest. In their opinion, after
work
or study, our mind was tired and no willing to handle more tasks to do, they need to relax,
otherwise
. They thought they could not be enough energy to face their
work
. After a day of
work
, people are tired to face a lot of
work
and their brain need
time
to update the information and skill study from a day. It might be better if people can get rest,
such
as listen to music, cooking, watching TV etc. Each item can cause happiness, and it can let people
to keep
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keep
a relaxing mind. After the leisure
time
, they can be more powerful to face the following
job
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jobs
. It is hard to let every
people
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person
still read
book
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books
in every
time
and not everyone would like training their sense whole day, but they can learn
to be relax
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to relax
and have good manage in their job, it
also
can make people to have better working power. Being good rest and keep fighting in their job.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive abilities
  • mental stagnation
  • intellectually stimulating
  • relaxation
  • meditation
  • stress reduction
  • overall well-being
  • personal development
  • life satisfaction
  • sense of achievement
  • emotional balance
  • peace of mind
  • scientific evidence
  • memory
  • learning
  • creativity
  • emotional regulation
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