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The line graph show of amount of carbon dioxide emissions in 1976 to 2007 in four countries united Kingdom, Sweden Italy and Portugal.

The line graph show of amount of carbon dioxide emissions in 1976 to 2007 in four countries united Kingdom, Sweden Italy and Portugal.
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The given line graph represents a comparison
among
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 four countries.
unitedkingdom
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united kingdom
UnitedKingdom
, Sweden, Italy and Portugal on the basis of
average
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the average
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 amount of
carbon
dioxide
 emission per person from
1976to
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1976 to
 2007.the data has been calibrated in terms of metric terms.
Overall
,
the
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carbon
dioxide
 emission decreased in Sweden and the United Kingdom
while
 that rose in Italy and Portugal over the time period. Now, turning towards the details of
carbon
dioxide
 emissions per person in the United Kingdom.it started from 11 metric
tonnes
 in 1987.
andit
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and it
 was
highest
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the highest
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 amount among
three
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the three
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 countries.in the
next
 decade,it declined slightly but in the
next
 three decades,it decreased rapidly to nearly 8 metric
tonnes
.
However
, as for as
Sweden
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Sweden's
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carbon
dioxide
 emissions were concerned.
intitialy
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initially
 it was recorded at 8 metric
tonnes
,
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but increased fastly in
next
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the next
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 years.
moreover
, Italy was
the
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third
 position in 1967 and it was noticed at 4 metric
tonnes
 but after ten years,it increased slightly and it was near about 8 metric
tonnes
 after which it gradually increased.the country of Portugal which followed an upward trend
in
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all
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the whole
years
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year
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 remained at the least position always. So,a significant variation has been recorded

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "next".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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