Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

A
crime
is the significant play role behind
lack
of few things
,
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,
which is unnecessary and
some times
on certain occasions or in certain cases but not always
sometimes
it creates
major issue
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a major issue
major issues
in routine life.A group of people think that when the culprit come back from
jail
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jail, then
then
they become absolutely good residents, whereas believe that these people are
the great
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the greatest
to say to adolescent about their dangerous progress and describe a
crime
and I agree with
this
second
statement.
Firstly
, I would like to talk about wrong
doer
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doing
, they are the best because when creates
crime
after victim is
lack
of skills, technology, and
lack
of good education.Thug
are known
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is known
their
jail
life because in
jail
are comfort zone for them.
but
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But
our rules and regulations are more far away to other foreign countries.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
crime
rates highly increased day by day
,
Accept space
,
although
people have been preferred to
crime
because they have some
lack
of confidence
on
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in
about
themselves.
Secondaly
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Secondly
,
first
and
more clear
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most clear
crime
rates
do not stop
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have not stopped
nowadays, but aware must be necessary for adults.Because non educated people choose to
crime
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criminalize
behind of moneys problem and many more things.
when
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When
wrong doers create a
crime but
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crime, but
they do not know about
jail
life and
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
rules and regulations of courts
,
Accept space
,
despite of
they
objective case of they
them
ready for
crime
.Buy they completed 5
years
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years'
time periods in
jail
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jail, then
then
they wake up some teenagers, so its beneficial for others. In conclusion, after some things are depends on our thinks, but I really appreciate about offender because while they gives some important information to teenagers and describe their
offense
a lack of politeness; a failure to show regard for others; wounding the feelings or others
offence
office
and I think it must be necessary for adults.
after
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After
they can not thinks how to take benefit of
crime
?
Accept space
?
What
happend
come to pass
happened
??
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
crime
creares
make or cause to be or to become
creates
major issues for everyone.I do not think about thug, when they back to home after they serious, and
also
better than before, it is impossible as per my view.

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