Some people who have been in prison become good citizens later and it is often argued that these are the best people to talk to teenagers about the dangers of committing a crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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of few things

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jail

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the greatest

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have not stopped

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criminalize

behind of moneys problem and many more things.

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wrong doers create a

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crime but

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crime, but

they do not know about

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life and

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despite of

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they wake up some teenagers, so its beneficial for others. In conclusion, after some things are depends on our thinks, but I really appreciate about offender because while they gives some important information to teenagers and describe their

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make or cause to be or to become

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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305 words

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