The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2010 and 2030. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2010 and 2030.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts
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illustrates the information, about the online shopping
sales
for retail sectors in New Zealand in the period from 2010
till
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2030.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph
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sales
of travel accounted for the highest percentage of all years and all
sales
it is 36%.
However
,
this
will decrease significantly in percentage
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2010 and 2030. The travel
sales
section,
on the contrary
, will grow from 21 per cent to 33 per cent, which puts them in
second
place among the main
sales
. Book
sales
will not change much, up just two
percent
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in 20 years.Online
sales
for
clothes
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the clothes
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retail sector will decrease by about 8
percent
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per cent
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for the period from 2010 to 2030
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will be the lowest percentage of
sales
, only 16%. In total, it turns out that online
sales
of books and films will increase.
While
rental sectors of clothing and travel
sales
will fall.

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