Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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things
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school will not teach us,
for
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how should we choose our
work place
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properly. Each and every
job
has upsides and downsides. Today I would like to discuss
about
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two main aspects which are considered the most important
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choosing a
work place
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. One of these aspects would be the
satisfaction
level on a daily basis, and the other one would be the security of it, with less
satisfaction
. Some people think that
satisfaction
is more important than
job
security and in
this
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I would agree
,
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if every
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was given a proper education and making them understand that they should do what they like and do it with passion. In
this
case
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I think it is not necessary to explain why a young adult would choose
satisfaction
over security. In
fairness
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if one chooses
this
path,
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have a greater chance for happiness and doing something properly. If somebody does something out of passion on a daily basis and he or she has
also
a talent for it, it gives them an advantage of proceeding to the next chapter and achieving greatness.
On the other hand
, it is understandable that a lot of people will not have the courage to take the riskier and
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less
secured
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job
, just to feel comfortable for a couple of hours every day at
work
. With a guaranteed income, we can make plans for the future.
For example
, buying a house or a car, which could be essential in possessing them
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long term, financially and psychologically
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also
. Owning a house can help us financially as we would not have to pay the rent month after month. Many people in my country consider it a goal to own a house so they
could
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leave a heritage for their children.
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could affect any individual psychologically as a
job
with a higher
satisfaction
rate not necessarily
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mean
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a higher income and houses cannot be considered cheap. In my
opinion
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I would rather
work
in a place and in a domain which I prefer or actually love it. Unfortunately, I had the
so called
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pleasure to have several jobs after I finished high school and to be fair, I was working long hours in places which not necessarily meant that I was doing something that I enjoyed. Those were hard times, as I was getting up every day and telling myself that no matter what, you need the income to maintain the lifestyle which was everything except luxurious. Doing what you love can be difficult, but if the person is determined, patient, and willing to give a hundred
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almost every day
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the results will come. In conclusion, each person should have somebody in their life to talk
too
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about getting a
job
, making the first steps in being
adult
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,
what
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pros and cons are there to be considered as no matter what,
this
will have an immense impact on your life and it will determine it.
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