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Should government give voulantary work to long term job seekers as to give back some help to the soceity?

#government #voulantary #work #term #job #seekers #help #soceity
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always have
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always has
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 question in the
society
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 that weather, governments should give the voluntary work for job hunters who are searching the work for very long time as a gesture in return to the
society
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. There is no
society
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 in the
world
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 untouched by the phenomenon of
unemployment
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. I consider
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 is one of the significant solutions to eradicate
unemployment
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 level
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The following paragraphs will discuss the different aspect of
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 concept
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 We are living in the era of economic fluctuations as we have never seen before due to the open economies trading in the
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 market
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, though there are more employment opportunities arises on the one hand,
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unemployment level
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the unemployment level
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is also accelerating
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 accelerating due to the fact that many job seekers can’t compete with the
world
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 standards.Other factors of
unemployment
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 would be lack of primary education
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poverty
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social and political instabilities and lack of equal distribution of income. India would be the prime example
for
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of
 the above mentioned complexities. Predominantly
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government should tackle
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 social instability.Giving volunteer work for unemployed people would be a prime solution to deplete
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 situation and it will be a helping hand to the
society
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 intact
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rather than just giving allowances and making people more lethargic towards their responsibilities.Many countries have been initiated
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 and it becomes a successful model. To conclude
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,
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we cannot completely wipe out
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 clog which halts many lives,
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 the prudent actions from both the government and people can make
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world
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 a better place.
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