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In many developing countries, there is a problem with declining quality of air and water from both industry and construction. What measures could be taken to prevent them?

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Introduction
The global phenomenon of urbanization since the beginning of industrialisation to the present day has brought opportunity and prosperity, albeit at a cost in the quality of life. Owning to the development of these industries, the air we breath and the
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 we drink are significantly polluted. The cause and
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The major cause for the dramatic rise in air and
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 pollution levels is the manufacturing and
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 disposal method adopted by these multinational companies. A many industries across the world, are burning coal for fulfilling their energy requirement, and all the toxic flumes from the large machines are released into the atmosphere.
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 into the rivers and oceans.
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 are highly contaminated with harmful chemical
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.
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Considering the
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, these companies should adopt a more environmentally friendly approach towards manufacturing goods by using renewable sources of power
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 as solar energy. Since, unlike coal and fossil fuels, these renewable supplies does not produce any greenhouse gases.
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, it will drastically lower the amount of toxins in the atmosphere and enhance the quality of air.
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, in order to reduce the
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 pollution, the government should enforce regulation to prevent these companies from disposing the industrial
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 into
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 bodies.
Conclusion
In conclusion, a rise in pollution levels due to these corporate facilities is a global concern.
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 a definite
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 is yet to be found.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pollution control regulations
  • emissions
  • discharges
  • green technology incentives
  • environmentally friendly practices
  • renewable energy sources
  • sustainable materials
  • waste management policies
  • recycling processes
  • environmental monitoring
  • compliance with environmental standards
  • public awareness campaigns
  • environmental protection
  • infrastructure upgrades
  • modern building techniques
  • international environmental organizations
  • air and water quality management
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