In many developing countries, there is an increasing movement of workers from rural areas into cities. Why do you think this happen? What problems can this cause.

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In the recent era, the labours of underdeveloped nations moving from rural

sector

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to urban areas.

However

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this

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essay will explain the causes that why people are going

toward

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cities

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pluse

on the positive side or higher end of a scale

plus

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also reveal

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also reveals

is also revealing

has also revealed

the problems if they move toward city centres.

Firstly

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the reason behind of their

movement

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is unemployment in their home town.In rural areas there are over

population

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and due to

over

too much population

overpopulation

population

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and lack of investment in underdeveloped

areas

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area

job opportunities

also

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less.

That is

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why they move to get

job

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jobs

and earn money for their lives.

Admitidly

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Admittedly

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the workers are

also

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moving toward cities

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because of better living

standered

a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated

standards

.The life style of

villagers

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the villagers

are

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generally not good because of unemployment

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hence

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they are shifting for earning money and for getting better facilities

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such

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as schools

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roads and hospitals

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recaptulate

summarize briefly

recapitulate

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it was

examind

consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning

examined

that the

movement

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of labourers from rural areas to developed ones in Pakistan

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because of

eployment

the state of being employed or having a job

employment

and for better living

standered

a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated

standards

Therefore

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, there are some problems due to

laboure

a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages

labour

force

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movement

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Suggestion

the

first

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hand they create the problem of

over

too much population

overpopulation

population

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in city areas.The shifting of workers toward

urban

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the urban sector, which

the urban sector which

sector

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which

cause

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numerous problems for

government

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government, such

such

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as unemployment and high traffic.

Furthermore

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they

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also creates

Suggestion

also create

the problem of

reduce

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reduction

reducing

in agricultural product, the

movement

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of workers from villages which

cause

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lack of work

force

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in agriculture

sector

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that

cause

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low production and many lands remain cultivated due to lack of

laboure

a social class comprising those who do manual labor or work for wages

labour

force

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.To exemplify it, it was observed in

last

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few

decade

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decades

that the reason behind of low production of agriculture were fewer worker in

fields

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the fields

. To sum up

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there are two

reason

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reasons

for

movement

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, to get employed and for better long

standered

a basis for comparison; a reference point against which other things can be evaluated

standard

and the

movement

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cause

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some problems

such

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over

too much population

overpopulation

population

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city centre

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the city centre

and low production in

agriculture

Suggestion

the agriculture sector

sector

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therefore

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there are

few problems

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a few problems

but

movement

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active

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the active force

force

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frouitful

productive or conducive to producing in abundance

fruitful

grateful

frightful

for

there

of them or themselves

their

lives.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

300 words

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