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There are more workers to work from home and more students to study from home. This is because the computer technology is more and more easily accessible and cheaper. Do you think it is a positive or negative development.

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Nowadays, advancements in technology made the computer more readily available and less costly. Due to easy availability of computer network worker often choose to
work
 from
home
 and even student opts to
work
 from
home
. In my opinion, I believe
that is
 a positive development and it will help us many other ways. On one hand, the mobility of
work
 will definitely reduce the stress of people.
In other words
, people will not have the burden to travel daily for the
work
 and can choose a suitable timing for them.
For example
, in a survey, people were given a choice to choose the
work place
a place where work is done
workplace
 for their job, it was found that about 65% people opt for working from
home
 as it induces less stress and it is more comfortable.
Moreover
, working from
home
 will surely reduce traffic in the city and it will be helpful for other businesses.
On the other hand
, it will completely destroy the working environment and social interaction, it will be very monotonous to
work
 daily without any face to face communication or social gatherings.
For instance
, I was studying an online crash course it was very uncomfortable to study as there was no one with me and I was all alone, I was not able to discuss simple doubts with a friend and not every time tutor likes silly doubts.
Further
, the interface of study platforms is not good and due to online traffic, the site gets collapse. To encapsulate, the congestion on the road will be reduced, it will be more convenient for people to study or
work
 from
home
,
however
, there are some disadvantages of shifting the
work
 culture online. In future the demerits can be easily solved. So, the improvements in technology are definitely a positive development.

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