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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Individuals can do nothing to improve the environment; only governments and large companies can make a difference. To what extent do you agree or disagree? You should write at least 250 words.

#minutes #individuals #environment #governments #companies #difference
In our modern life you cannot do anything in an individual
plan
 to achieve that goal, So you have to be in a
band
 or to let a big
band
 make that goal
instead
 of you. The chance of achieving the goal is so neat to be if a
band
 decides to do it.
That is
 our topic today. We have many companies in our capital city that can do a
lot
 of projects in a successful
plan
 and help the society to be more comfortable. Eventually, It totally depends on how much the governments and companies have their ambition to achieve that goal.
First
, We have in the middle east so many successful companies that can do lots of projects and in a better
plan
 that you can do it in an individual
plan
 for yourself, because they have a
lot
 of techniques, materials, many people and so on features that can help them more than you as individual one. One of the most important companies is AL- AMANY company
band
 that has a
lot
 of successful projects, It has actually achieved it in a completely
plan
 and has helped many many people.
Second
, In every country they have a
government
, So I think in my opinion each
government
 has all the abilities to achieve and do every project to help people to live more comfortably than previous years. Even if it takes a
lot
 of money as a cost of these projects. China as an example of the great
government
 that helps their people to live more comfortable and made a
lot
 of projects
such
 as the houses as a shape of triangle
plan
 help them to see their environment clearly,
However
 they
also
 can achieve a
lot
, still think of new projects and think how to improve the mobile phones to help millions of people all over the world.
Finally
, my main aim of
this
 essay to help more people with a good
plan
. Do not forget that individuals cannot achieve a
lot
 like the groups,
such
 as the important companies as a private
plan
.
Also we
Accept comma addition
Also, we
 must be in touch with the
government
 that help us to achieve a
lot
 of projects make our life is so good. So actually Working with groups is more benefit than individuals to achieve goals.
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