Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country police force or military force , such as army , while others think that women are not suitable for these kind of jobs . Discuss both views and given your opinion ?

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men

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the development

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Certain human beings opine that there should be equality between males and females in a nation's

police

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or military

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such

as army

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while others claim that females are not fit for these type of jobs

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will discuss both the given perspectives and my opinion

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there are numerous of reasons why women should join

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the police force

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the same standard

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men, hence

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sorts

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any female

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they are appropriate in these two fields

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some individuals believe that women are not capable of doing these jobs owing to learn of physical strength and stamina as compare to men

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women can do stereotypical work

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there are tremendous of departments in these jobs where they are perfect

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In a nutshell
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10Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 8.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Some people believe that women should play an equal role as men in a country police force or military force , such as army , while others think that women are not suitable for these kind of jobs . Discuss both views and given your opinion ?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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