In many countries smoking is now illegal in public places, Many people believe that such a ban is justified do you agree or disagree?

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The status of illegal activity assigned to smoking in public has developed some criticism but

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approvement

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improved

improvement

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hand, there

are those who support

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choice,

on the other

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hand some

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people claim that

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is not fair. In my opinion,

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ban can only benefit people's health when they are

outdoor

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outdoors

. It is claimed that passive smoking is far more dangerous than the 'active smoking'.

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in the private people can breath their own smoking, in public many people should be

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feeling

safe to be not exposed to the risks caused by passive smokers. An evidence for

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is that people who normally don't smoke can suffer from lung cancer. Public health should be preserved from the consequences of smoking.

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, toxic substances released

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into

the air by smokers can affect

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different kinds

of people outdoor as pregnant women, children or patients with breathing problems. For

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reason, smoking in public would be a real

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treat, both

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threat both

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for healthy people and for those who already suffer from a disease. The threat to public health is a serious matter. To sum up, the illegality of smoking in public should be supported because of the serious consequences it brings to the

individual's

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individual

organism. The choice of the smokers cannot be imposed to the collectivity.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

217 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

secondhand smoke
prevalence
respiratory issues
environmental pollution
litter
healthcare costs
smoking-induced illnesses
encourage smokers to quit
public health improvement
justified
public spaces
exposure
non-smokers
inconvenience
younger populations

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