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In many countries smoking is now illegal in public places, Many people believe that such a ban is justified do you agree or disagree?

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The status of illegal activity assigned to smoking in public has developed some criticism but
also
approvement
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improved
improvement
. On one
hand there
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hand, there
 are those who support
such
 choice,
on the other
hand some
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hand, some
 people claim that
this
 is not fair. In my opinion,
this
 ban can only benefit people's health when they are
outdoor
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outdoors
. It is claimed that passive smoking is far more dangerous than the 'active smoking'.
Wherease
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Whereas
 in the private people can breath their own smoking, in public many people should be
feel
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feeling
 safe to be not exposed to the risks caused by passive smokers. An evidence for
this
 is that people who normally don't smoke can suffer from lung cancer. Public health should be preserved from the consequences of smoking.
In addition
 to
this
, toxic substances released
in
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into
 the air by smokers can affect
different kind
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different kinds
 of people outdoor as pregnant women, children or patients with breathing problems. For
this
 reason, smoking in public would be a real
threath both
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treat, both
treat both
threat both
truth both
 for healthy people and for those who already suffer from a disease. The threat to public health is a serious matter. To sum up, the illegality of smoking in public should be supported because of the serious consequences it brings to the
individual's
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individual
 organism. The choice of the smokers cannot be imposed to the collectivity.
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