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For many, shopping malls are great places to spend their leisure time and meet others.people however in the past mostly visited those when necessary . To what extent do you thing this is a negative trend?

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Nowadays, shopping malls are just like an amusement park where people meet their friends and relatives.They become the best place to
timepass
 apart from the shopping.It is very much true people visited these places before when they felt a particular need which could not be satisfied with outside shops. I am completely denied that it is a negative trend.
First
 and foremost resin is that with the help of these malls economies is growing.People regularly visit
such
 places not for shopping
,
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because they want to spend quality time with their near and dears. Mostly these shopping malls provide best restaurant to eat, they serve to distinguish food to cater the need of people.
Further more
in addition
Furthermore
, these markets posses needle to big cars. So people easily escape from unnecessary wandering to find the best suited things
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about
 their need.
Moreover people
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Moreover, people
 feel free from worry, from their children best engross to play station for their children where their children can easily enjoy for hours. Most malls have cinema hall, people enjoy more there.
However some
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However, some
 people are
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arguing
 that these shopping complexes have vanished small business in the street.Mostly people blamed that malls charged, highly for small pity thinks. Even drinking water in malls is not free.
Moreover poor
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Moreover, poor
 people are forced to purchase
the things from these
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these things from the
big
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bigger
 markets rather than in small. Shop in small shops due to unavailability of the things in open shop. One serious cause for these malls are blamed that people waste most their time in these places especially the children roam around unnecessary. To sum of these, in view these malls have best suited to. Present culture and scenery so they are impacted to negative trend in society Even they come up with best suited products to customers.

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