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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: It has been claimed that workers over 50 are not responsive to rapidly changing ideas in the modern workplace and that for this reason younger workers are to be preferred. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. Write at least 250 words.

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In most of the company nowadays, the younger
employee
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 is more likely to get a job rather than a person who is more than 50 years old as stats shows that they are unable to cope up to the fast and growing ideas in the office compared to a younger individual. I completely disagree with the statement
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given, as
 workers over 50 are still useful
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in
 the workplace.
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 of all, I believe that the older generation of individuals is able to provide greater
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-related experiences compared to the younger
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.
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, the older employees are able to handle any type of issues at any time as they have multiple
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 experiences from their past jobs and can handle job which it is out of scope compared to the younger
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 who is only getting started.
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, to
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date, as
 per information found from the Star Newspaper shows that most of the big organizations in the world have their top position
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 as
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a CEO
 or manager as an
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 more than 50 years old.
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, the older
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 is able to handle
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 pressure better compared to their younger co-workers.
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,
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 pressure
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gives
 a lesser impact to the older
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 as they are used to it. As for the younger
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 they are only starting
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to settle
 into life with the pressure from
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, family, and others it will be quite a task for them.
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, they are stats found on the internet showing that younger people tend to commit suicide more nowadays due to
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-related problems. To sum it up, It would seem that a mix of the best qualities of old and young is
preferential
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preferred
 in order to ensure the most productive environment evolves.
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