Due to the development and rapid expansion of supermarkets in some countries, many small, local businesses are unable to compete. Some people think that the closure of local business will bring about the death of local communities. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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competitive era

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and

every one

all people

everyone

strive

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strives

gives

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give

cutthroat competition to each other for

better life

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a better life

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, supermarkets

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not left in

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competition, and due to the development and rapid expansion of

supermaket

a large self-service grocery store selling groceries and dairy products and household goods

supermarkets

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local trader become unable to compete them

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and it is often argued that due to the closure of small local

bussiness

a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it

businesses

business

which effect

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the local communities

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and it may become reason of the death of local people. I completely disagree with

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statement.In

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essay,

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view, duly

arguments and based on

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opponents,

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inextricably effect to the life of local people.

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of all, local people are not able to buy from the

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is because they belong to middle class family and they always deem to purchase from

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local stores

a local store

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insted

in place of, or as an alternative to

instead

of supermart.

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rapid expansion of big mall it badly effect to the life of local

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and local people.

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deem that

super market

a large self-service grocery store selling groceries and dairy products and household goods

supermarket

is not effected to the local

bussiness

a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it

business

businesses

and local layman.

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firstly

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gives lots of benefits as well discount in shopping.

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is because they

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do collaboration with

local trader

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local traders

a local trader

, and they give a chance to sell their products in

super market

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the supermarket

supermarket

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they make a sell in every month, and it is affordable to middle class family.

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people get a

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lot

of benefits and discount from the one place.

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, according to the survey of times of

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a republic in the Asian subcontinent in southern Asia; second most populous country in the world; achieved independence from the United Kingdom in 1947

India

, more than 65% of local people like

to purchased

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to purchase

the item from the

supermarket

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among

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between

2017-20 because they got a lot of benefits and discount from there. In recapitulation,

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strongly believe that

supermarket

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biggest source

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the biggest source

of products from where we get thousand of products which are lowest price as

compare

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compared

local

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the local store

local stores

store

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.In fact

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they give several benefits to the local

people which

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people, which

is not possible in local

store

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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335 words

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