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Some people think that poverty is the reason behind most crimes. Do you agree or disagree ?

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Poverty
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 is one of the main reasons for all miseries. Many governments are trying hard to abolish
poverty
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 in their countries. International organisations are working hard to help the poor people. A lot of people argue that
poverty
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 is the main reason behind most crimes and I strongly agree with their arguments. Being poor in
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 sophisticated world is really hard. We are living in a world, where some people are spending thousands of dollars on food, and some are struggling hard to eat once in a day. Rich people are eating gold, where poor people are not even having a slice of bread. These vast differences in the society are causing risky behaviours in suffering groups. Some people, especially teenagers in
poverty
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 are more vulnerable to making crimes, because of their aggressive nature. Sufferings, hunger, hate make them to commit crimes. It all starts with small robbery to survive, eventually, it will become their lifestyle. Some people say it is all like a loop,
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 is the reason by
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 education and
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eduaction
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
 the reason of
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. Everyone in
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 society should take responsibility to take care of poor people. There are many organisations working for the poor, we should support them. There are a lot of countries suffering with
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. International society should help them by giving funds and giving them proper education. Education always helps people to thrive, that gives them knowledge and the chance to help others. Through the education, intention to make crime will decrease,
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 gives them a better life. By cumulative efforts, we can eradicate
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 and crime rate.
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