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Many countries use fossil fuels( coal, oil, natural gas) as the main source of energy. However, in some countries the use of alternative sources of energy( wind energy and solar energy) is encouraged.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this development.

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Today world has been suffering from many global environmental issues and
one
 of them are the
green house
a building with glass walls and roof; for the cultivation and exhibition of plants under controlled conditions
greenhouse
effect
 and climate change which
does not cured
Suggestion
does not cure
 completely.
However
, several changes can
deminish
decrease in size, extent, or range
diminish
 the effects of it.
Use
 of fossil fuel is
one
 of the main
reason
Suggestion
reasons
 and it can be solved with the replacing
use
 of them with renewable
energy
 sources. In my essay, I
am completely agree
Suggestion
completely agree
have completely agreed
 with
this
 notion and in following paragraphs I am explaining my views. Fossil fuels are the main and effective
energy
 sources since past. It's demand augments day by day. It is
asscoiated
make a logical or causal connection
associated
 with the excessive industrialization and it appears only obvious that oil
,
Accept space
,
coal and
natral
in accordance with nature; relating to or concerning nature
natural
 gas rich countries would largely
use
 them to take benefits of their
stock
 of
such
energy
 sources.
For instance
, China and India are rich in coal and USA has huge
stock
 of oil. Addition to that, Other developed countries have limited
stock
 of
such
 fuels and keep import them from the other countries at a
consideberaly
to a great extent or degree
considerably
cheap
Suggestion
cheaper
 rate.
However
,
Stock
 of fossil fuel is limited and would get exhausted at a certain point. So, Alternative sources which are renewable, the main source of
energy
 in
future
Suggestion
the future
 and we should get ready for the time when we will not have the oil and coal. As the
wind
 and solar are renewable sources, government should patronize industries to
use
 them and it is
good
Suggestion
a good effect
effect
 that
this
 trend is already started. Alternative sources of
power
Accept comma addition
power, such
such
 as
wind
, solar and hydro, do not pollute the environment and are eco-friendly.
Use
 of them
cutrail
Suggestion
cuts rail
cut rail
 green house
effect
 along with the climate change. From recent past years, India has produced approximately
one
 fifth amount of total electricity from the renewable
energy
 sources and much more countries are joining the list. In
this
 technological era, we have enough capability to produce
energy
 from solar and
wind
 and government should encourage people to
use
 renewable
energy
 sources
instead
 of fossil fuels. To recapitulate, the
stock
 of fossil fuels
are diminishing
Suggestion
is diminishing
 and in upcoming years at
one
 point there will be scarcity of these resources.
Furthermore
, It's
consuption
the process of taking food into the body through the mouth (as by eating)
consumption
 contributes to
green house
Suggestion
the greenhouse effect
greenhouse effect
effect
 and climate changes which leads detrimental effects on the planet. In
contratory
very opposed in nature or character or purpose
contrary
, Solar and
wind
are
Suggestion
is
 eco-
fiendly
characteristic of or befitting a friend
friendly
 and renewable
energy
 sources. So, We should turn on to these resources as well as share the technique with other nations so they can start using renewable sources and together we can take a step to save our planet.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable resources
  • carbon footprint
  • greenhouse gases
  • energy independence
  • climate change
  • environmental impact
  • infrastructural development
  • technological innovation
  • economic disruption
  • fossil fuel depletion
  • energy transition
  • consistency and reliability
  • wildlife habitat
  • natural landscapes
  • solar panels
  • wind turbines
  • energy consumption
  • ecological balance
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