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The table compares the proportion of water usage for domestic, industrial and agricultural purposes in six countries of the world in the year 2003.

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The table illustrates how much
water
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 had been used for domestic, industrial and agriculture purposed
of
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in
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 six nations in 2013. The data shows
as
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the percentage of
the
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apply
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water
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 usage.
Overall
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, in terms of the
water
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usafe
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usage
unsafe
safe
od
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of
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 domestic area, Australia was the biggest user,
while
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 Canada shared the largest
spent
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spending
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 for
the
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industrial purpose. And Chinese were using
water
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 in agriculture mostly, making up the primary user in the year 2013. European countries,
such
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 as Russia and UK, shared
a large amounts
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a large amount
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 of
water
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 usage in industry, had 62% and 73%, respectively.
Whereas
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 Canada accounted for 81%
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water
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of water
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 usage in the same area, making it the
leader
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 user among all. on the
contry
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contrary
country
, Australia showed
negilible
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negligible
legible
ineligible
 numbers
on
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in
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industrial
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the industrial
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 area. And in terms of agriculture,
UK
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the UK
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 just made up 4%, the less number
of
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in
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this
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 category.
Likewise
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, China just used 6% and 7% respectively in domestic and industrial aspects.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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