It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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some people that some people have their own talents in
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and playing games, and
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they can gain their success from their own dedication, so
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plenty of abilities and skills. Living with vast popularity,
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life.
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, someone who doesn't have
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, there are a lot of men and women that we can find the way successfully by comparing who had the lucky lives. In a nutshell, anyone living with the great occasions that they may be in higher grades, and others
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success beyond that doesn’t have. In my opinion, I think that anyone who has the courage and the necessity can obtain what he/she wants.

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task achievement
To improve task response, focus on addressing each part of the question more directly. Ensure that both views are clearly discussed and balanced in terms of coverage. Include a more explicit statement of your own opinion, with supporting arguments, to make it clearer to the reader.
coherence cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas logically and use clear paragraphing. Try to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs with appropriate linking words and phrases, such as 'on the other hand,' 'for instance,' etc., to improve coherence and cohesion.
task achievement
The essay covers both views, acknowledging that some people are born with talents while others can achieve success through effort.
coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, framing the discussion effectively.
task achievement
The essay attempts to include examples to support its points, which strengthens the arguments presented. This is a positive approach, though examples can be made more relevant.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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