The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two diagrams display the location and design
for
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a wave-energy machine. The whole process of generation of electricity from
water
has been shown. Both the diagrams clearly depict the electricity generation process with
one
showing the direction of
flow
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the flow
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of
water
and
air
, and the other
one
showing the two different kinds of wave-energy machines,
that is
the small waves- low output and large waves- high output. In the first figure, we can easily see the
flow
of
water
and
air
. How the
water
through waves enters the machine which in turn produces an
air
flow
to rotate the turbines. There is an inlet for
flow
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the flow
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of
air
from the top of the machine as well which
also
helps in the rotation of the turbine. In the
second
figure, the two different kinds of machines have been displayed with their locations. The
one
at a higher altitude receives less amount of
water
hence
produces
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a lower output and
also
has
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a lower installation cost.
While
the other
one
receives more amount of
water
being
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at a lower altitude,
therefore
produces
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producing
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a greater amount of electricity but costs more for installation.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water, one, flow, air with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 3 times.

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