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The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two diagrams display the location and design
for
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 a wave-energy machine. The whole process of generation of electricity from
water
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 has been shown. Both the diagrams clearly depict the electricity generation process with
one
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 showing the direction of
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flow
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the flow
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 of
water
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 and
air
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, and the other
one
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 showing the two different kinds of wave-energy machines,
that is
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 the small waves- low output and large waves- high output. In the first figure, we can easily see the
flow
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 of
water
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 and
air
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. How the
water
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 through waves enters the machine which in turn produces an
air
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flow
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 to rotate the turbines. There is an inlet for
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flow
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 of
air
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 from the top of the machine as well which
also
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 helps in the rotation of the turbine. In the
second
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 figure, the two different kinds of machines have been displayed with their locations. The
one
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 at a higher altitude receives less amount of
water
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hence
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produces
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producing
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 a lower output and
also
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has
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 a lower installation cost.
While
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 the other
one
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 receives more amount of
water
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being
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at a lower altitude,
therefore
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produces
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producing
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 a greater amount of electricity but costs more for installation.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, one, flow, air with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "waves" was used 3 times.
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