The diagram below shows the stages and equipment used in the cement-making process, and how cement is used to produce concrete for building purposes. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The 1st pictorial diagram illustrates the phases and equipment used in the
cement
-making process and 2nd pictorial diagram shows how it is then
used for production
Correct article usage
the production
concrete
for building purposes.
Change preposition
of concrete
Overall
, limestone and clay pass through four stages before being bagged ready
for use as Correct word choice
and ready
cement
which then
accounts for 15% of four
materials used to produce concrete. Correct article usage
the four
While
the process of making cement
uses a number of tools, the production of concrete requires only a concrete mixer.
In the first stage of making cement
, limestone and clay are crushed together to form a powder. This
powder is then
combined in a mixer before passing into a rotating heater which has constant heat applied at one end of the tube. The resulting mixture is ground in order to produce cement
. The final product is afterwards put into bags ready to be used.
Regarding the second
diagram, concrete consists of mainly gravel, which is small stones, and this
makes up 50 percent
of the ingredients. The other materials used are sand (25%), Change the spelling
per cent
cement
(15%) and water(10%). These are all poured into a concrete mixer which continually rotates to combine the materials and ultimately produces concrete.Submitted by sahoosain1994 on
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