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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to the closure of the shops in cities and towns. Do you you agree or disagree.

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In
this
 technology based world, a surged demand for the virtual shopping is re-exceeding its proportion and could be a major cause for the prohibition of opening the authentic shops. Some people claimed that a time set aside for the purchase of items can be a
timesaving
Suggestion
time-saving
 whereas it will be a matter unless it matches to the preference of the patron. It is disagreed that an internet shopping is to not replace the traditional shops. From the overall prospective, it is to be attentive to the customer’s busy time
of
Suggestion
for
 an online shopping. Through providing the desirable choices as they will accomplish saving time,
furthermore
, it does not contingent on the locality and can be purchased whenever they wish
moreover
 the bought product will be delivered to the mentioned location within about 30 minutes without an extra pay.
For example
, it is arranged that the workers carry the item without damage and it is preferable for 63% of Koreans. From the other hand, another drawback is to oppose the aforementioned viewpoint in which a typical style of patron cannot be found in the virtual shopping and
some
one or some or every or all without specification
any
 tricky sites can stop them believing in. Unless the client of an online shopping can buy or find the products depending on their preference the rate of shop’s reliability is to be decreased.
For example
, 87% of Tajik people rely on purchasing via malls in countries. In conclusion, despite being rapid of an online shopping, most people prefer shopping through malls that spurs people to rely on their self-confidence.
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