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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest time of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibility. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Every phase of human
life
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 has
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 own perks. A part of the population is of the view that teenage is the most amazing part of the human
life
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, while others believe adulthood is filled with rich experiences as well as more pleasure
,
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,
inspite
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in spite
 of increased responsibilities.
in
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In
 my opinion, young
age
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 is the merriest phase in
lifetime
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the lifetime
 of a human being.
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 essay will analyse both views and provide a logical conclusion. One of the major reasons behind teenage years being considered
joyfullest
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 is that people are generally carefree and have less duties during
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time
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.
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alot
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a lot
 of young people are still pursuing their education which gives them a lot of
time
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 to socialise, visit new places and follow their passion. Provided that,
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 period allows humanity to try out new things without stakes being high.
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, a survey conducted in 2015 showed
majority
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the majority
 of adults wanted their youth
life
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 back as it was simpler.
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, adults
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 indicated that they were able to pursue their hobbies when they were teenagers without any worries.
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 depicts the joys of young
age
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.
On the other hand
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 adult
life
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 has
it's
of a thing, of it; possessive form of "it"
its
 own advantages. Adult years bring freedom and a sense of ownership in a person's
life
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. Not only, numerous people start working in these
time
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period
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periods
, but
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, buy properties and assets which can impart a feeling of self dependence.
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, these are the years when
majority
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the majority
 of people incline towards family planning.
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,
number
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a number
 of authors
have wrote
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have written
 books about how self dependence and family can make
life
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 80% more meaningful.
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, adult
life
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 has numerous advantages, a vast number of adults are unsatisfied with their
life
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 due to financial constraints and family obligations. To conclude, young
age
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 can be called the jolly
age
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 due to less responsibilities and more
time
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 available to one's self.In my opinion, teenagers simplify
life
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 while adults tend to have a more complicated
life
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 which, in turn decreases the pleasures in spite of numerous reasons.
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