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modern forms of communication have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has had a negative effect on their social lives. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#forms #communication #amount #time #people #friends #effect #lives
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 types
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 as email and messaging have affected spending
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 with your friends and social lives. I don’t think, these changes have made less connection with friends, but it has changed to a little extent negatively. Contact in the past was slower than nowadays. Modern
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 ways lead to make it
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more rapidly
, so they access news about their friends easily, so they can be closer than once. In the past
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, people communicated a long period because of
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ways
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 currently, they can do it whenever they want.
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, modern
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 types have made less about
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, but these don’t obstacle
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 a meeting.
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 can be a personal choice. New forms of
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 have been rising social life positively. People are busier than in the past because the challenges of modern life request that people must work more. They have no
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 for
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, technological ways of
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 allow them to contact easily.
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, when I have worked the company for 12 hours, I couldn’t meet my friends, so we missed each other, but we contact when we miss each other thanks to new technologies.
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, these have affected at some points badly. Easy access to people has reduced the importance of
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. They can break each other because
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 which significant activity for friendship easier to understand the value of friendship In conclusion, I believe that modern types of
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 have made strong it between people by making our lives easier and have improved people’s social lives.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • proliferation
  • superficial interactions
  • emotional depth
  • non-verbal cues
  • misunderstandings
  • isolation
  • convenience
  • meaningful connections
  • overreliance
  • digital communication
  • expanding social networks
  • geographical limitations
  • mobility issues
  • vital social interactions
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