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Question: The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of the telephone call in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

Question: The chart below shows the total number of minutes (in billions) of the telephone call in the UK, divided into three categories, from 1995-2002. Summarise the information by selecting a reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The bar chart shows the combined time spent in billions of
minutes
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, on three kinds of
the
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phone call in the United Kingdom, from 1995-2002.
Overall
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, local calls were the most popular over the whole period, with national and international calls and calls on mobiles
second
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 and
third
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 respectively.
However
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, the number of
minutes
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 spent on national and international calls and mobiles both increased over the period; with mobile
minutes
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 increasing dramatically,
thus
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 narrowing that gap between the three categories by 2002.
Minutes
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 spent on local calls fluctuated over the time period; with just over 70
billion
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minutes
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 in 1995, peaking at approximately 90
billion
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 in 1999 and
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 steadily decreasing to just over 70
billion
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minutes
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 in 2002. National and international calls increased steadily year on year, from just under 40
billion
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minutes
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 in 1995 to a peak of just over 60
billion
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 in 2002. Mobile
minutes
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 increased at a very rapid pace from approximately 3
billion
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 in 1995 to around 45
billion
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 in 2002. Mobile phone usage nearly doubled from approximately 22
billion
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minutes
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 in 2000 to 40
billion
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 in 2001.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words minutes, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • total number of minutes
  • telephone calls
  • categories
  • local – fixed line
  • national and international – fixed line
  • mobiles
  • general trend
  • yearly totals
  • significant changes
  • milestones
  • data
  • rise significantly
  • decline
  • steady increase
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • exponential growth
  • over the period
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