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Should young people follow older people’s advice or is it good for them to challenge older people’s opinions and thoughts? Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #people’s #advice #challenge #thoughts
It is argued that whether youngsters should follow the
foot path
a trodden path
footpath
 of their older people or it is
best way
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the best way
 to challenge grey
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a covering for the body (or parts of it) consisting of a dense growth of threadlike structures (as on the human head); helps to prevent heat loss
hairs
haired
hard
 people's believes and thoughts
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 me correct
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the upcoming paragraphs
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To begin
 with
reasons
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the reasons
 why young people should follow
olders
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the elders' advice
elders' advice
elder's advice
advice
.
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First
 and foremost is that grey haired people have vast experience and
knowledge
. They have faced many challenges in their life. They
thought
impart skills or knowledge to
taught
 young people how to deal with
problem
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the problem
problems
.
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.
That is
 why
,
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,
 young people learn from their past mistakes and solve their problems easily. Apart from
this
,
youngster
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the youngster
come
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comes
 to know about their culture and moral values. Their past generation helps them to choose
right path
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the right path
 of life which path is beneficial in their future. So, with the
advice
 of grey
haried
having or covered with hair
haired
 people they got
sucess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
 in their life
.
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.
therefore
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Therefore
, young people should follow
advice
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the advice
 of
old
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older
 people. Moving towards the others people's opinions
,
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firstly
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owes
is owing
 to modernisation.They do not have enough
knowledge
 reading technology and science. In modern era, every work on technology
.
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.
youngsters
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Youngsters
 do work on electronic gadgets.
if
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If
 they
gets
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get
are getting
advice
 from old people
,
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,
 their work will be wrong
.
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.
because
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Because
,
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,
 they have no
knowledge
abuut
(of quantities) imprecise but fairly close to correct
about
this
. Old people have
therotical
concerned primarily with theories or hypotheses rather than practical considerations
theoretical
knowledge
 rather than practical. So, it is best way young people challenge old people's
advice
. To encapsulate,
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refers to the speaker or writer
I
 would like to restate that
although
 both people have strong opinions.
but
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But
,
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,
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
 deem that young people follow old people
becouse
for the reason that; on account of
because
 old is gold.
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