Children who are brought up in families that do not have large amounts of money are better prepared to deal with the problems of adult life than children brought up by wealthy parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Kids who are raised by rich parents might not be as prepared in facing problems in their adulthood as those who live in low-income families. In
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are the most important tools. Somebody who was raised in a poor family could have a better preparation in dealing with an incoming problem, because during his or her childhood
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they probably had encountered many adversities, and may have developed a certain attitude towards difficulties that allowed them to build a strong character.
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, living in those conditions could possibly have helped the person to understand the value of money.
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, a weak personality might have found life extremely hard and could have developed serious personality disorders
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from parents, he or she would grow "enriched", despite the financial position.
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, lots of famous people who come from
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received. Rich kids contrary to poor children grow up without economic troubles, and they have the chance to attend the best schools where they can receive a better
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, there are some children whose parents have a deep understanding of economic subjects
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so they could learn those skills from an early age.
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, others might not be able to face problems in life, considering that they never had to.
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, we often hear of people that, in spite of their wealth, struggle in life because of the missing support of their parents. In my view, a person coming from a low-income family might have higher chances to solve a real-life problem than those who were raised in wealthy families.
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my belief that the biggest role is played by both parenting and
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