Shopping is the favorite pastime for most of the young people. Do you think they should be encouraged to do some other useful activities?

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In today’s era where people

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get

easily

influence

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influenced

with movies and television and different marketing adverts encourage them to purchase more and more products in the blink of an eye by ordering products online which not only save their time but

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provide them convenience to get the product at their

door step

the sill of a door; a horizontal piece of wood or stone that forms the bottom of a doorway and offers support when passing through a doorway

doorstep

. According to me, shopping is not a bad hobby for anyone.

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, due to technology where purchasing anything is not difficult at all and anyone can purchase products online easily, people

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are encouraged

to purchase products which they think, will be beneficial for them or they can use the product in future.

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, in today’s world, there

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are

a lot of depression and sadness mostly among

younger generation

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the younger generation

so they find comfort in spending money and purchasing products which will make them look beautiful or which would benefit them in showing off to other people. Recent studies suggest that shopping has

psychological effect

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a psychological effect

on people. By purchasing products, their frustration gets

reduce

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reduced

and they feel satisfied after spending money on them. Contrary to my point of view, some people would suggest that young people should spend their money on useful activities like playing outdoor games which do not only benefit them physically but

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improve their mental health. I do not agree with their point, because not everyone is a sporty person and some people have an introvert personality and they do not find comfort in mingling with other people.

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Other

activities like purchasing health care memberships, or learning swimming would

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not be suitable for everyone as not everyone is happy to engage in activities which require their physical activity. In conclusion, I would like to say that people should do whatever makes them happy. Some people find happiness in performing activities like shopping, others may find that engaging in physical activities is more useful than shopping. According to me, people should perform activities which

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make

them satisfied.

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

pastime
encouraged
useful activities
self-expression
creativity
sense of accomplishment
satisfaction
social interaction
bonding
escaping
daily routine
stress
instant gratification
pleasure
keeping up
trends
fashion
exploring
products
experiences
boosting
self-confidence
supporting
local businesses
economy
discovering
personal style
preferences

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Shopping is the favorite pastime for most of the young people. Do you think they should be encouraged to do some other useful activities?

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