The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The diagrams below show the design for a wave-energy machine and its location.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The first diagram outlines the design of a wave-energy machine and the mechanism
that is
involved in the conversion of
the
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tidal energy into
electricity
.
Whereas
, the
second
diagram shows the factors that are important in siting/locating these
machines
.
Overall
, wave-energy
machines
are energy-efficient and operate in a simple manner to produce
electricity
. The location of these
machines
, whether placed in shallow or deep waters have its own advantages and disadvantages. A wave-energy machine consists of two chambers, a
turbine
and a generator. The inward movement of water waves in the lower chamber rises the water level and forces the air to displace into the upper chamber under pressure.
This
pressurised upward air current powers the
turbine
to rotate. The vacuum
thus
formed
as a result
, in-draws more air through the duct on the left top corner and
further
adds power to the rotating
turbine
.
Lastly
, the generator converts the kinetic energy of the
turbine
into
electricity
. The
second
diagram shows that the location of these
machines
is of paramount importance. If located near the coastline, in shallow waters, it involves
less
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costs, but the output is low
due to
the small tidal currents. In comparison, the offshore locations with higher tides produce more
electricity
, albeit at
a higher construction costs
Correct the article-noun agreement
higher construction costs
a higher construction cost
show examples
.
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