Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security. Others think that people cannot expect to enjoy a job and that having a permanent job is more important. 🔸Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are different opinions about contributing factors in a good appointment. Some people believe that
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satisfaction is more important in comparison with
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freedom. Others, including me, think that having a steady career is more important than an enjoyable
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because it can bring serenity and close bonds in a family. One the one hand, a permanent task can bring mental health for people. A steady
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can encourage people to trial harder because a worker knows that,
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in the
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year he or she would not be out of production and do not suffer from the stresses and strains of those times to make the ends meet.
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, by hard working people can achieve higher grades and positions in their occupation,
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they can accomplish to a higher income. By earning more money, they probably do not suffer from financial problems so they are likely to have a serenity.
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, career security can create strong family ties. Nowadays in many countries, including my country, Iran, there is a high rate of divorce due to
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fact that loads of people work in jobs which are not permanent.
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, their
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for just one year and
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of some issues
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as financial problems their authorities inform them that they do not need to workers so they would be jobless.
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negatively affects the bond between families because being out of performance means that a person does not have money to handle a family. In
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bad circumstance, if a person has a steady
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they know that they can work for a long time and his or her wife would not be worried about her life.
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, some argue that having an enjoyable occupation is more important compared to task preservation because
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can bring happiness and make
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effort easy for people. They believe that nowadays people are snowed under a huge volume of effort as well as are struggling with the difficulties of their jobs and believe that in
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situation an enjoyable production can bring happiness to workers and mitigate the difficulties that workers encounter at their occupation.
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, I think that a positive state of mind which can stem from a permanent career brings much more happiness and an easy performance. In conclusion, I believe having that
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security is much more important than an enjoyable task since it can create mental health and reinforce family relationships.
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