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Some People Think That Job Satisfaction Is More Important Than Job Security. Others Think That People Cannot Expect To Enjoy A Job And Having A Permanent Job Is More Important. Discuss Both Views And Give Your Opinion.

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It is observed that, human being has
different belief
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a different belief
different beliefs
 about
job
 satisfaction and security of their
work
. According to some individuals, gratification from hob weighty than
job
 security, others believe that always enjoyable
work
is
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has been
 difficulty and better to have a permanent
job
. Both the views will be given below in paragraphs. Some part of people consider that pleasing
work
 better than fixed
job
.
the
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The
 primary reason for
this
 can belief than efficiency
from
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of
work
 will be higher which can bring
benefit
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benefits
 for employer and
also
 for
employee
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employees
the employee
.The
second
 idea it is about health benefits offered by the content mind,
also
 can affect
to personal life,
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personal life,
 which can
also
 help to keep
relationship
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the relationship
relationships
 between family in good quality. The other part
consider
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considers
 to
life-long
continuing through life
lifelong
 employment even if they do not take pleasure
job
 place. They believe that
continuously
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continuing
job
 can gives stabilized income. Usually people need
regular salary
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a regular salary
 only for fulfilling their necessity and should satisfy family requirement and
therefore
 they can live a happy life
.
Accept space
.
 To
analyzing
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analyse
analysing
 these two parts of people
,
Accept space
,
 it is believed that
job
 should pleasure employee and
also
 give safety for them because it is leading
for
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to
 stress-free and comfortable life.
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