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the carts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The pie charts represent the average of three variety nutrients (
sodium
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, saturated fats and added sugars)
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 meals in the United Stated, which affect a serious health condition if over consumed. The data provided are measured in percentages. Overall, the majority of
Sodium
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 and Saturated fat are found at dinner; the slight
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also
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 contains at lunch, while added sugar tend to consist in snacks. Only breakfast meals provide a low level of the three substances. The trend of
sodium
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 and saturated fat can be grouped as identical pattern, whose at dinner is the highest percentages (43% and 37%, respectively) and have approximately 3% of difference at lunch (29% of
sodium
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 and 26%
of
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from
 saturated fat). Meanwhile, saturated fat has recorded as much as 21% in snacks,
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 with
sodium
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 that only reach 14%;
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 is the same point in snacks, as well. With regard to added sugar, the peak percentage of it is at snacks which stand at 42% and following by 23% at dinner. At lunch,
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 ingredient has marked 19% whose the number has nearly resemblance to the lowest level of all nutrients at breakfast, namely: 14% of
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, 16% of saturated fat and at the exact amount of added sugar.

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