For a long time art has been considered an essential part of all cultures in the world. However, nowadays people’s values have changed, and we tend to consider science, technology and business more important than arts. What do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to draw people’s attention to art?

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From the ancient time

art

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has been playing a key role in our life.

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this

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modren

belonging to the modern era; since the Middle Ages

modern

era importance of a person's life have changed and people emphasize science

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technology

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and business.In

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has this occurred

is this occurring

is this occurs

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occurs and what are the reasons

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a logical conclusion

the logical conclusion

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these days

, science is going so far.

scientist

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keen to work because they found it interesting and they love do researcher on

particular thing

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a particular thing

particular things

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have

responsbilty

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the responsibility

responsibility

of the

thier

coming next after the second and just before the fourth in position

third

country

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medical

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development etc.

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instance

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any, disease

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is spreading all over the countries scientist do research on how to get rid of it.

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, it can be said that

technology

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is would be the same as science but there are some

differance

the quality of being unlike or dissimilar

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without moving from your bed you can get food by just simply clicking on your phone and your food will be at your

door step

the sill of a door; a horizontal piece of wood or stone that forms the bottom of a doorway and offers support when passing through a doorway

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and lot more things.

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art

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a crucial part

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cultural life, it

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clearly characterized or delimited

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the words.

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separated into parts or pieces

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into the genres and it is divided into sub genres

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anyhow there are few forms of

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art music,dance

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art, dance music

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sculpture and so on.

people

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near

towards

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art whether

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art, whether

it is a form of music or dance.

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other words, in a marriage

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is used for entertainment purposes

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arranging a

kareoke

singing popular songs accompanied by a recording of an orchestra (usually in bars or nightclubs)

karaoke

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music band etc.

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further

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sculptures and paintings are more likely to show the point of view of the world. In conclusion, people are enjoying the

technology

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because a person

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does not need

any skill to use that.

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although

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they enjoy

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too but

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too, but

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need skills by concluding

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we can clearly see that a person is depending on the others

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by the

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people become

use

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used

to it that can be

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the reason

a reason

they are moving towards

technology

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STEM fields (Science, Technology, Engineering, and Mathematics)
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