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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that many cities in the world are now 'one big traffic jam'. How true do you think this statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from using their cars?

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These days, the rate of owning a
car
 is increasing. One reason that people buy their cars is because they are more comfortable to move to places which they want to go than the public transportation. From what I experienced, I was always in trouble that I had to find a way to get my grandparent’s house because of the lake of the public transportation. So I had to use my
car
 to get there. Due to these reasons, if the proportion of using a
car
 is more and more high, it will bring a lot of issues to our society. One of the problems which it causes is traffic jam. And it
a
lso lead
Suggestion
also leads
to air pollution.
Therefore
, the government should map out measures to solve these problems. The chief solution is to make the public transportations more convenient than in now. If they make people feel comfortable when they use them, the amount of using them will go up. The
first
 way is to improve the current service accessible to rural areas. The current service is difficult to access to isolated areas. So through improving
this
 case, the government should make people take buses and subways when they want to go to rural areas.
S
econd ssolution
Suggestion
The second s solution
Second s solution
is to expand the space of the public transportations.
For instance
, it is that the current buses are changed to the double d
eckers'
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Deckers
deckers'
Deckers'
. And to make the space for people with uncomfortable body is the best way. In conclusion, I believe that the government should take action and these solutions will encourage using of buses and subways. So I
also
 believe that the proportion of owning a
car
 will decline.
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